Number 3 “I take you from believing you have no choices….” starts well but it is not leading me anywhere to be motivated to know more. At least not for me. It kind of fizzles out. Change the ending of that one so it make me really interested.
The rest I like and I would go for it. I certainly what to know more, which is exactly what you want as a response so you can start a conversation. Keep going. You’re doing good. Develope variants of these and run them live with people for the purpose of noticing the response. Change one word here and there until you get exactly the response you are after.
